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Monday

 

Signs of Winter by Laura and Ellie

Went out in the cold, snow and ice
Then my nose made a glow,
My hands all wet freezing cold.
Made a snowball, ready to throw!

Wearing my hat, scarf and gloves,
I built snowman, gave him a hat,
Added a scarf and a carrot nose,
Made the snowman thick and fat.

The frost is coming icicles hang
The snow is sparkling shimmering glittering,
Little robins pecking for bread..
But the butterflies wont be fluttering!

Click here to listen to Signs of Winter by Ellie


Click here to listen to Signs of Winter by Laura

Comments:
*Star* - I love the description of the snowman, especially the line 'Added a scarf and a carrot nose'.
*Star* - The adjectives you have used to describe the snow are excellent - sparkling, shimmering, glittering.
*Wish* - You have done very well with the punctuation but could you put in the commas between the adjectives because it is a list.
S.Buchanan
 
*+*star*+*-my hands all wet freezing cold made a snowball ready to thorow

*+*star*+*-the snow is sparkling, shimmerng, glittering.

?wish?-more ryhmeing words.
 
I Liked your poem It was very INTERESTING.
 
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