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Monday

 

A Cold Snowy Night by Ben and Andrew

In the cold winter evening
When I see the snow falling,
Landing on my garden shed
I know that winters calling.

On a cold snowy night
The church bells are ringing,
I can hear outside the houses
Carol singers singing.

I’m dressing up nice and smart
I’m putting on my Christmas bow,
Because I’m staring in my
Winter Christmas Show.

Click here to listen to A Cold Snowy Night by Ben

Click here to listen to A Cold Snowy Night by Andrew

# posted by Woodhill Primary School @ 3:58 AM
Comments:
*Star* - You read your poems with a good sense of rhythm.
*Star* - You have really made us think of winter with your descriptions of the cold, the snow, the carol singers and dressing up for a Christmas Show.
*Wish* - Can you add commas and full stops to the end of the lines to show readers where to take a pause?
S.Buchanan
# posted by Blogger Woodhill Primary School : 12:58 PM
 
Thanks Mrs Buchanan
We have fixed it
Thanks again
Ben & Andrew
# posted by Blogger Woodhill Primary School : 3:26 AM
 
STAR*-I liked the bit when you said "when I see the snow falling".

STAR*-I liked it when you said it clear on PC.

WISH*-I don't need a wish your poem was good.
# posted by Anonymous Anonymous : 6:49 AM
 
STAR-It sounded clear on the computer.

STAR-I like how you made it rhyme.

WISH-Please can you make it longer.
# posted by Anonymous Anonymous : 6:53 AM
 
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